ext_19781 ([identity profile] coell.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] starbright73 2008-09-25 06:33 am (UTC)

Suggestions for chapter 5

There are a few typos if you'd like to know about them:

that was one ting he hadn't expected. = thing

leaving it burning before he softer air = the

Of course she's check that = she'd

We really have to thread carefully = tread

He dosed off to the drone of a Hallmark movie. = dozed

The talk-shows reruns = talk-show reruns

wrecked with shivers = I always thought shivers wracked with an A, but the dictionary doesn't confirm that, so I suppose wrecked is ok too.

His eyes narrowed when they followed John itinerary out of the room. = I don't think itinerary (schedule) is the word you're looking for?

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